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[naitvalis]

recently i feel in the mood of draw something "dungeons & dragons" related, so here it is result, used this one as a guinea-pig for ink experiments.



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[Outcast]

That's a great drawing.

I wish i could draw like that.

[juancho]

OMG that niiiiiiiiice!

I cannot really give any serious feedback. I know nothing about art, but yours looks awsome!

[naitvalis]

many thanks Outcast and Juancho, oh and i'm always open to draws requests.

[PreRaphaelite]

you immediatly noticed that i'm not an inker!

Inker shminker (to be technical) - this is a grand piece of work! It's nice to see you play around with inking, shading and linework, because it really pays off in this image. The composition is dynamic, and there is a good sense of action. The attention to detail is again very impressive, along with the tactile quality of the textures (on the chainmail, shield and maul/mace especially). It also shows how much you like drawing monsters - they look bizarre and creepy, a good mix.

That said, I think the one main nitpick I have is that you should remain vigilant with your proportions. I say this just because the female Mage seems to be a wee bit stumpy in the limbs compared to the trunk of her body. I know a lot of the characters have fantastical proportions, being dwarves and halflings etc (I really like the halfling!), but unfortunately that means it's going to be more of a challenge to give them a sense of realism. So it's a real feat you've achieved this for the most part!  The second, perhaps minor comment is that it might be nice to see some threat coming from the dark behind them (a tentacle, eyes, a claw, Barbara Streisand) to give a reason for the Warrior turning around, away from the mob of approaching mutant creatures. After all, if the Mage's magic is illuminating the area, the background wouldn't be completely black.

Other than that, it's great, I really enjoy what you've done here, and I hope the coloured version is even better!! 

[ow_tiobe_sb]

I'm sure Dana would have something (very good, I'd wager) to say about this piece.  Brilliant, says I!  I could easily imagine this illustration appearing in the pages of Dragon Magazine or--dare to dream--one of the official rule books.   

ow_tiobe_sb
Phantom Bunburyist and Whirled Braker

[naitvalis]

many thanks PreRaphaelite , you are a fantastic reviewer for this things!
and infact  i'm not totally happy of that mage to, but at least she'll fit almost good in the composition. and u have spotted me again on the background, infact i want try the ink part rapidly, and havent drawned the background monsters  .
many thanks again, its very important for me to have yours and other members support.

(p.s. still laughing for that " barbara streisand")

[naitvalis]

New one.
want to draw something exotic, so started this, is still unfinished, i think is kinda relaxing to look. 



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[Previsionary]

That looks very nice, naitvalis. Is that a guy riding some type of bird in the bg?

[cmdrkoenig67]

Those are fantastic, Nait!

Dana

[naitvalis]

to Prev. : thank you! yup is a guy on a big bird, well that supposed to be a guy of the same military corp of the main character.

to Dana: thank you! i'm glad you have noticed my work.

[PreRaphaelite]

Good stuff Naitvalis! You're certainly a keen artist, which is nice to see. I don't have much time, so I'm gonna jump right in and apologise now if there are some mistakes/repetitions.

The detail and composition are great, and the expression on the man's face is whimsical and vacant, which works particularly well for the tone of the piece. There is very much a sense of longing in the picture, whether for a past life or for a fantastical one, and the simple sepia wash-effect contributes to this nicely. It's by no means a photographic image, more a memory cast in the guise of a photograph. The accessories are crisp additions, and though I can tell you spent most of your time on the main figure, I do quite like the unfinished sketchiness of everything from the window outwards - it adds to that questioning of 'is this real or imagined?' I think you need to be careful again with proportions as his head is a tad too large for his shoulders. I also think hiding his right hand behind that sketchy vase (which is an unnecessary addition to the picture) is a bit cheeky, and that the teacup could use a bit more work.

Other than that, it's a lovely piece, and I think you did a grand job. Just don't be afraid to keep pushing the envelope! 

[naitvalis]

hahaha wow Pre ! i'm looking to that flower vase and remember the moment ive drawned it cause i was to lazy to drawn the other hand, and now you've noticed immediatly!!
thanks for the prescious review!!

[Figure Fan]

These are some nice drawings. I especially like the composition of the second one. I think that if you wanted to cover up the hand , you could just bring the flowers/vase closer to the viewer in the picture plane, like he's standing in front/slightly to the side of it. But that's if you're picky, because it looks fine as-is. The detail in the medals and the cup are nice too

[naitvalis]

insert some censor cause i don't know if nudity is allowed (there is nothing too scandalous but just in case...btw the uncensored version is on deviantart ).
i'm not happy with the centaur's tail and other 1000 things but at least i find this nice.



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[ow_tiobe_sb]

I like it; however, the black tail on the rider and the black levers protruding from the chests of both rider and centaur strike me as a bit odd.  The big fellow (not to be confused with "the Big Fellah") in the distance seems eager to pull one of those levers...

More seriously, the only two comments I would make--if you are looking for feedback--would be

1. The centaur's tail (which you've already mentioned) and buttocks do not seem to adhere to the typical look of a horse's anatomy.  The tail appears to originate somewhere in the anus, a fact which becomes even more apparent because you have foregrounded it in this piece.

2. IMHO, I think the planets/moons in the sky could use more definition (especially since the seemingly cirrus clouds in the sky do not seem adequate to obliterate the surface details of these heavenly bodies).  Having two bodies in the sky clearly marks this as an alien setting, so why not engage the viewer's imagination more with a clearer view of these planets/moons, even if their surfaces are, in fact, cloud covered?

Nicely done! 

ow_tiobe_sb
Phantom Bunburyist and Whirled Braker

[PreRaphaelite]

Well, unfortunately I'm no longer a member of DA, so I won't be able to comment on the uncensored version.

There are quite a few things I like about this image. The angle you've chosen for the centaur and the girl aren't easy to draw, so I must straight away commend you for challenging yourself. The texture, inking and movement of the hair is done well, as is the grass in the foreground. There's also a sense of light-heartedness about the image, and the poses of the girl and the centaur are certainly jubilant. I also quite like the fact that the centaur has an androgynous look, with a very muscular, masculine body - though evidently female.

From what I can see of the censored parts of the image (beneath the "black levers" and "black tail" ), I think you need to be very careful about the way you portray breasts. At the moment there is something very comical and artificial about the way they seem almost "stuck on". Don't get me wrong, there probably would be some "side boob" showing (as the kids say these days), but the strange inking and severe line-work make it look as if they're detachable - especially in the case of the centaur. It almost looks as if he/she woke up one morning and thought "Yes, I think I'll wear the cleavage today. Thonk." If you perhaps played with your shading a little here, went for some gradation in tone, and maybe shied away from the bulbous 'breasts are round and always perky' stereotype, it would have given a slightly more tasteful finish.

Also, I must agree with ow_tiobe_sb - keep an eye on that horse anatomy! Maybe have a look at copies of Gericault's sketchbooks for inspiration - he was all about the horses. Seriously. Loved them. Couldn't get enough.

Otherwise, it's great to see you powering on, and I look forward to seeing what pops out of your head next. 

[naitvalis]

thank you ow_tiobe and PreRaphaelite! you two are great observers and i really appreciate your honest reviews!
sooooo if i have understand all i must draw that sasquacth pull lever in the next draw *take a note on a piece of paper* ok ....(no really, thx again guys)

[naitvalis]

so i haved this idea. still incomplete as always...but i think the "concept" is funny .



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[PreRaphaelite]

As a concept, it certainly has its charm.

I like the vampire girls waving at the 'camera' and the idea they've just been out walking their pet werewolf about town. They give the picture a lot of life, and I think you've posed them quite well. The zombie in the bottom corner again tells me how much you like drawing monsters, and there's a good amount of detail there.

Nevertheless, as you said, it's still very incomplete, and I would like to see a more polished version before I can give you any real feedback. What I will say though is that I think you could play a little more with the normal vs. supernatural elements. Perhaps rather than the gloomy place you've created (with somewhat confusing colouring and an ill-defined background) you could create a really bright, cheerful, relatively normal looking place that is then subverted through the inclusion of vampires, werewolves etc and their... uh... more 'grisly' actions. That is just a suggestion -  otherwise, do keep going with it. Spend some time pondering what you can do to really amplify the 'joke' without going overboard, and then take even more time executing it to the best of your abilities. 

[naitvalis]

many thanks Pre the idea was a sort of postcard, i hate use mouse for coloring thats why i never complete my works sometime( or most time ). i appreciate your suggest, about background, and is certainly a good one. And you have all the reason when you say i like draw some things like monsters for example, while i lost all the "joy" in colour phase i can add.
thats cause i'm no good at all with colouring softwares, today i have re-fished my watercolours after years...

[naitvalis]

and painted this, however this is not the original colour version . is the clasic theme "the sword in the stone" on another world...or maybe time. (i know i'm rusted).


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[naitvalis]

ok this is still a pencil work but even in this form stealed me some time...lets see what you think, and where is your side  .



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[Outcast]

Freedom Reborn avatars, heroes vs villains! Pretty cool Naitvalis. Pretty cool.
Can't wait to see the colored version.

[Tomato]

Freedom Reborn avatars, heroes vs villains! Pretty cool Naitvalis. Pretty cool.
Can't wait to see the colored version.

Actually... it's not. Take another look, on one side is Afghan Ant, Figure Fan, TUE, my av, Podmark, and Aly Cat(?), on the other is C6, GG, Mike, Unko, Gren, and Spud(?). Podmark is the only real Villain in there.

I really like this sketch. It's dynamic, there's a wealth of avatars used (always a hit for me, even without mine being included) and the artwork itself is really well done

[MikeB7]

Hey cool!  Great expressions on the characters.  Figure Fan's pose made me chuckle and I really like your rendition of me.   

[Outcast]

Freedom Reborn avatars, heroes vs villains! Pretty cool Naitvalis. Pretty cool.
Can't wait to see the colored version.

Actually... it's not. Take another look, on one side is Afghan Ant, Figure Fan, TUE, my av, Podmark, and Aly Cat(?), on the other is C6, GG, Mike, Unko, Gren, and Spud(?). Podmark is the only real Villain in there.

Yeah. You're right Tomato. Guess i was just too excited when i saw the drawing.

Still it's truly amazing that you were able to draw them Naitvalis.

[The Hitman]

Dude! That is FANTASTIC! Great job!

[MJB]

Wow great job, Nait!

[naitvalis]

many thx guys  !